My English Short Story =.=

Oh, and i just remembered that i was supposed to post my short story up...the one that had three comments and two of which were unconstructive and stupid comments...yhh here it is... (oh, the pencil writing didn't turn up after scanning so i had to go over it =) all the stuff in red are the pencil comments =.=") oh, and for anyone who didnt hear...apparently the Department of Ed sent out an email to all teachers to forbid the use of red pen when marking because it's 'demoralising' for student...i wonder what will happen in the future now that all the teachers are marking in pencil...
 

 yes that's it =)